I think everyone in my group gave me helpful tips and suggestions,

Abbey suggested that i should go further indepth with one of my sentences. It was a little to broad and should be explained better in my later paragraphs. She also pointed out a few gramitcial and puncuational errors for me to correct. She was also very nice and out smiley faces by good paragraphs and good points

Pricilla focused on very specific things i needed to work on which is very helpful. I mentioned that i thought the government needed to have some control and regualtions for the educational system but i was too broad with my ideas and my thoughts on changing NCLB

Andrew was quite through my becuase I was short a copy but he assured that i didnt ramble too much in my paper which i was concerened about before i read it.

The most helpful piece of advice i received was to not be so broad and go into more depth about my ideas.

while it is nice to hear, i though the least helpful advice i got was "good work" i was hoping everyone would be a little more critical. While no one wants to hear or say this needs to be changed, this doesnt flow very well here or whatever, i thought i could have handeled more constructive critisim.

For my final draft i really want to work on getting more in depth. I want to try and expland on my ideas without rambling and making no sense. I really want to focus on editing one specific paragraph where i talked about how kids in failing schools struggle in new ones after being taught with such simple ideas.